tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post6003813980831809187..comments2024-03-12T11:54:32.019+08:00Comments on MÉMOIRES OF A MEDOLL: Rate Our Writers! - Writer #3 (Gluttony)icônehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17861457513938046060noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-46892670590547248402012-02-25T06:29:39.481+08:002012-02-25T06:29:39.481+08:00This writer has a very flamboyant style of writing...This writer has a very flamboyant style of writing. <br />He/she knows they're intelligent and (somewhat) skillful when it comes to writing--and he/she flaunts it. <br />These kind of posts (that I will admit to writing myself once upon a time) are usually long (check), somewhat boring (check), and hard to read (check!). <br /><br />The key to making a good post is not doing what this writer has done; rather, stating a point clearly and getting to it quickly. Don't take the readers off with you on your tangent, and don't let your opinion get in the way of stating the facts objectively. You can make your opinion on the subject clear in the end, which will also help you to transition into that sometimes turbulent and scattered conclusion. This writer didn't do so, and the long and ramble-y conclusion showed it. He/she also didn't use the correct transition words when he/she started to wrap up the post with a 'In conclusion[...]'. <br /><br />I may just be getting down to the gritty details that no one pays attention to, but these are the things I noticed that detracted from my enjoyment of this post. <br />So, in conclusion (to whomever wrote this post): <br />1. Don't focus on loading up the post with flamboyant and flashy vocabulary--it often distracts you from your point and usage of correct sentence structure and other facets of grammar. <br /> a. If you need to add flashy grammar, put in ordinary words and then proofread and swap them for more eloquent ones. The correct way to proofread is by putting down your piece and partaking in other activities. Then, after no less than an hour, come back to your piece in a different frame of mind and correct your grammatical mistakes and spelling errors and swap our those words that have fancier counterparts. <br /><br />2. Make an outline of your article [four square preferably (look it up if you don't know what I mean, this is not a grammar class)] and then stick to it. Consult it whilst writing if you feel you are drifting away from the core of your point. This goes hand in hand with #1 above. <br /><br />3. Edit, edit, EDIT! Your post was TOO long. Less is more. A more concise, well-written post that is shorter will grab a reader's attention (and keep it) more-so than a long oration. I won't tell you how or what to delete--use your God-given judgement. All I can say is: do not be afraid of that delete button. <br /><br />4. Please, please, PLEASE... proofread. <br />Simple spelling errors (that could've been fixed had you taken the time to PROOFREAD) make people question your credibility (and the competence of your grammar teacher...) in important essays and such. Don't worry about it too much for Stardoll (a quick once-over in the method I told you before should be good enough), but otherwise, please, please, PLEASE proofread. <br /><br />That's all, I hope these tips help you. <br /><br />PS: I only take the time to write this out for people I believe have potential. It was a solid post, but I believe you could have a brilliant post for your readers every time if you work on some things. Good luck.victoria0926https://www.blogger.com/profile/06018608997686003614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-72670433309344979062012-02-19T22:33:41.930+08:002012-02-19T22:33:41.930+08:00There are very good points in this post and the wr...There are very good points in this post and the writer has an amazing vocabulary, but I personally think it's too - how do I say it? Too long and stuffed up with big words as if you got a dictionary for Christmas and finally found a use for it. Of course I like this kind of words in a post, they are beautiful, but this is way too much.Maria ☺https://www.blogger.com/profile/17927247205840401827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-2473720297760547352012-02-18T07:38:04.915+08:002012-02-18T07:38:04.915+08:00I agree with many of these comments in the fact th...I agree with many of these comments in the fact that it's boring. Nothing about it catches your eye or motivates you to read it. It was good but I read the first few paragraphs and got tired of it. There is use of interesti ng vocabulary I suppose, but it seems like this person wasn't letting their own voice through and was masking it with fancy words. As I said, I read a bit but then skipped the rest because he/she was always going on about the same point. There wasn't many different sides to this post, different angles and perspectives, so I'm sorry, but I voted it boring. I do not want to see more of this on this blog.samijadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05697797362804073358noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-73006346665193132652012-02-18T00:12:49.971+08:002012-02-18T00:12:49.971+08:00I just skimmed it, from what I could see, there wa...I just skimmed it, from what I could see, there was very good word choice, punctuation and grammar, but the legnth makes her/him seem a bit like a try-hard. I would add something to make the most moree visually appealing, and possibly a little shorter. Not many people will take the time to read an essay on a website. It's hard enough writing them xD.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-14546083404717093982012-02-17T14:40:53.124+08:002012-02-17T14:40:53.124+08:00Your article reminds me of LoveGossip4Life's c...Your article reminds me of LoveGossip4Life's comments. <br />Still not sure if that's a good thing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-86926607610607264202012-02-17T11:43:22.740+08:002012-02-17T11:43:22.740+08:00This post is truthful but too long, glutony means ...This post is truthful but too long, glutony means greed which transpires also in starbazaar prices. But some people on stardoll just have items for the fun of it not necesarily because it's the latest item. At least they bought the items & didn't steal them through hacking or scamming. What I don't understand is the rare items or their starbazaar prices.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-77277019815732271872012-02-17T10:00:30.198+08:002012-02-17T10:00:30.198+08:00^Your comments make me 'lol' from how seri...^Your comments make me 'lol' from how serious they are.Deihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17497315866090846898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-51383576994711772502012-02-17T08:28:36.760+08:002012-02-17T08:28:36.760+08:00At the very end I started to doze off, but I reall...At the very end I started to doze off, but I really was astounded by this writer's such divine vocabulary! I don't mind reading long pieces of writing, however the majority of our society doesn't seem quite appealed to the very way those long <i>essays</i> work. I gave her/him an "awesome" due to their way with pulling in the audience. Good work, you've got my approval!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-63764188691036534462012-02-17T07:44:38.524+08:002012-02-17T07:44:38.524+08:00people with short attention spans here. Not all wr...people with short attention spans here. Not all writing has to have pictures to grab attention.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-6183710868075917402012-02-17T06:17:59.337+08:002012-02-17T06:17:59.337+08:00It's very well written but it was really hard ...It's very well written but it was really hard for me to read - just because it was making me feel uninterested by the start of the 2nd paragraph :( It's too 'newspaper-ish' lol<br />If you added a bit of life & maybe pictures it would be perfect though (:Ciara Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10560912311941025509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-79036219008261146432012-02-17T03:39:32.165+08:002012-02-17T03:39:32.165+08:00The writing is decent but I didn't read the wh...The writing is decent but I didn't read the whole thing, too long and wordy. I didn't see any personality in it either, it felt like I was reading a textbook.The Antagonisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05976605354952024873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-84226265777061785552012-02-17T03:38:56.328+08:002012-02-17T03:38:56.328+08:00This comment has been removed by the author.The Antagonisthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05976605354952024873noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-84406287989036660812012-02-17T01:45:50.571+08:002012-02-17T01:45:50.571+08:00When this post said it was going to be about '...When this post said it was going to be about 'Gluttony', I thought this should be interesting to read. No way. I found this plain boring. No pictures, endless text. I don't mind reading but those constant paragraphs were all going on and on about one thing. It needed some spice to it.Kamile999https://www.blogger.com/profile/12538676403659461084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-14500872977616803912012-02-16T22:34:35.606+08:002012-02-16T22:34:35.606+08:00I thought you had great points in this, I really l...I thought you had great points in this, I really liked it!Aislinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05058072820978017898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-59844233374051813122012-02-16T22:20:14.169+08:002012-02-16T22:20:14.169+08:00I really loved this one! I just hate that people d...I really loved this one! I just hate that people didn't even bother to read it.Sofi/Lulla96https://www.blogger.com/profile/07415386546595256184noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-71688869663568695142012-02-16T22:17:50.252+08:002012-02-16T22:17:50.252+08:00It's a bit boring. I hardly read it at all. Th...It's a bit boring. I hardly read it at all. The writer should add some humor into his/her post, made their voice come through the writing, that sort of thing.Rainanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-11385984340816361492012-02-16T22:05:55.074+08:002012-02-16T22:05:55.074+08:00tl;dr
I bet it's abbeydawn122, right?tl;dr<br /><br />I bet it's abbeydawn122, right?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-38480130250791391262012-02-16T21:43:11.403+08:002012-02-16T21:43:11.403+08:00A very good post! I gave it a Awesome! a lot of ef...A very good post! I gave it a Awesome! a lot of effort was defiantly put into it! But maybe if it was shorter, it could have got the message across sharper. xxx Tay :)TinkerTayzbell- Tayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10520701625625639755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-71678522039181899682012-02-16T19:12:46.084+08:002012-02-16T19:12:46.084+08:00I really liked it. I gave him an awesome.I really liked it. I gave him an awesome.s∂ku✝∂rohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11790590666502759839noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-46414208570404289362012-02-16T17:05:56.910+08:002012-02-16T17:05:56.910+08:00It was a good post, but I started to get a bit bor...It was a good post, but I started to get a bit bored at the end... I would advise that he/she works on this (also with the use of pictures as mentioned above), but other than that I think this was quite well written.Krystyna Pnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8735345199193512077.post-36800111339015949582012-02-16T16:41:02.381+08:002012-02-16T16:41:02.381+08:00way too long, didn't bother to read it all, al...way too long, didn't bother to read it all, all that text and no pictures makes it really not appealing to readMilenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04678262353072210161noreply@blogger.com